Describing what happened did a character take you into a movie.(Corrected)

An evening, the TV was showing a movie called “Congo”. Most of my family members were sleeping. Only my brother and I were watching the movie. Then, my brother went to drink and left me alone in the sitting room. The television was lighting in the darkness. Suddenly an orangutan appeared on the monitor and the main character was calling for help, he stretched a hand to the audience. Hopelessness was filling in his eyes. His hand was waving as long as he could and the hand came out from the television. My arm was tingling at that moment and then I found myself in a jungle.

When the character saw me, he asked for help though he knew I couldn’t help him. We had no time to talk and we ran as fast as we could. Luckily we could escape from the orangutan and we hid in a cave. We questioned each other and we didn’t know what the matter it was. Although he had a tool but he still could not fight against the orangutans. He couldn’t find any helpers. Some of his partners were killed by the orangutans. Hopelessness filled in his eyes again. I didn’t know what should I said and we heard the hue of the orangutans nearby. We know we must escape from the cave at that moment.

For each step, we moved carefully and quickly. We wanted to move faster but we couldn’t make any noise. Luckily we found a person who was a partner of the character. It was obvious that the man was happier than ever before but we know we couldn’t slacken. We moved to many other places in order to be safe. I felt really tired and I slept under a tree sweetly.

When I opened my eyes again, I saw two men on the monitor .They were really excited . They were waving their hands and clothes to the sky. A helicopter came down and saved them. I didn’t know the names for the man as well until the movie had finished.

15-5-2006

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Describing what happened did a character take you into a movie.(original)

 

In the(An) evening, the TV was showing a movie called ※Congo§. Most of my family member(members) were sleeping,(.) only(Only) my brother and I were watching the movie. For some not exciting part (Then), my brother went to drink water and left me alone in the sitting room. The television was lighting in the darkness. Suddenly an orangatan(orangutan) appeared on the monitor and the main character was calling for help, he stretched a hand to the viewers (audience). Hopelessness was fulling(filling) in his eyes. His hand was spreading(waving) as long as he could and the hand came out from the television. I felt painful on my arm (My arm was tingling at that moment) and then I found myself in a jungle.

When the character saw me, he asked for help though he knew I couldn＊t help him. We had no time to explain(talk) and we ran as fast as we could. Luckily we could eacape(escape) from the oranguto(orangutan)and we hide(hid)in a cave. We ask question(questioned) each other and we didn＊t know what＊s the matter(what the matter it was). Although he had a machine, he couldn＊t eacape from (tool but he still could not fight against) the orangutons(orangutans). He couldn＊t found another explorers (find any helpers.) and he saw some(Some) of his partners were killed by the orangutans. Hopelessness fulled(filled) in his eyes again. I didn＊t know what should I said and we heard the hue of the orangutans nearby. We much (know we must escape) eacaped from the cave at that monment(moment).

For every(each) step, we move(moved) carefully and quickly. We wanted to eacape(move faster) but we couldn＊t make any noise. Luckily we found a person who was a partner of the character.It was obviously(obvious) that the man was happyer that (happier than ever) before but we (know we) couldn＊t slacken. We moved to many other places to stay (in order to be safe). I felt really tire(tired) and I slept under a tree sweetly.

When I opened my eyes again, I saw two men on the monitor (.They) were really excited and swaied (. They were waving) their hands and clothes to the sky. A helipo(helicopter) came down and saved them. Until the movie had finished. I didn＊t know the names for the man as well (until the movie had finished).

15-5-2006